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The plans below show a student accommodation buildings 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The given plans illustrate a
student
Use synonyms
 residence building in 2010 and nowadays.
Overall
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, there are several modifications between the two years
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 some areas were added, others remained the same, and others disappeared. On the one hand, in 2010, the accommodation contained a bathroom in the middle of the building, attached to one of the three
student
Use synonyms
 bedrooms.
Also
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, there was a kitchen and a living room attached to a
student
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 bedroom, and a hallway near the main entrance.
Moreover
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, the building was surrounded by gardens.
On the other hand
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, nowadays, the bathroom and the hallway remain in the same place,
while
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 a social area has been added to the kitchen.
In addition
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, the living room has disappeared, with a remarkable increase in the number of
student
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 bedrooms from 3 to 5.
Furthermore
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, an en-suite room has been added in the hallway, and a car park has been created on the right of the main entrance, replacing the garden. Meanwhile, the garden on the other side still exists.

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task
Task response: The essay covers main changes well. Try to add a short opening and closing line to sum up, and check that every detail is clear to the reader.
structure
Coherence and cohesion: Use a clear flow. Start with the general idea, then give 2010 facts, then the present plan facts, and end with a short compare.
feature
Clear compare of old and new plan.
feature
Good use of linking words to show change.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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