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The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the amount of
dour
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different waste products that were reused in a town, over a decade, from 2000 to 2010, in percentage.
Overall
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, 2010 had the most recycled materials and 2000
the
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had the least on
an
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averag
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average
,
cans
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 being the lowest and metal being the highest to recycle.
In
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At
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 the start of
2000
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2000,
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 all materials
including
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, including
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 plastics,
cans
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, papers and
metals
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metals,
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 had 10% to 12% of
it
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them
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 recycled, where
cans
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 and paper were about 12%, metals had 11% and plastics had only 10% of the total. By the
mid
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 of the decade, in 2005, metal was the most reused item
reaching
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 a little short of 30%, followed by 18% of reused paper. Meanwhile, only 12% of plastic and
cans
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 were recycled.
Although
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 towards the end of ten years in
2010
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2010,
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 an average
recycle
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recycling
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 rate grew
expotentially
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exponentially
, where almost 40% of the total metal was put through
recycle
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the recycling
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 process.
Although
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 the rate of plastic
recyclingwas
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recycling was
 still at 15%,
cans
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 and paper reached 35% and 29%, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cans with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Recycling rates
  • Type of waste
  • Decade
  • Increase / Decrease
  • Trends
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Significant change
  • Observation
  • Underlying factors
  • Technological influences
  • Environmental impact
  • Societal influence
  • Waste management policies
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