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Writing Samples
Band 5

You have just learned that your friend has recently become engaged. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● tell him/her how you found out ● explain how you feel about the news ● organise to meet your friend for a celebration. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___________, (301)

Dear Denise, I'm writing to express my happiness after hearing that you are engaged now. I was so surprised and thrilled at
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 as
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 had
been always
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 your special time to think about. Actually, I was scrolling
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instagram
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Instagram
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and
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, and
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 I came across your engagement pictures, posted by your brother. You were looking so stunning
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 I
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had never
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have
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you seen
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 in a make-up look before. So happy to see a beautiful couple. I'm so excited to hear about your engagement and came to know that you have engaged
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a doctor that you
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have always
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 wanted.
This
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 is really amazing to hear. I apologised because I could not attend
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 ceremony as I was out of station for
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 months and was not in touch with family and friends
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 some personal issues. Please let me know when you are available. I want to celebrate these special moments again with you. I feel
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 to have
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a friend
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 like you and definitely want to
become
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be
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 a part of your most important moments. Let me know if you can make
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this
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it this
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 weekend. See you soon,
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 friend, Claire.

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language
Fix grammar and spell many small errors. Use 'Instagram' with a capital I, 'apologised' vs 'apologize', and 'Yours' not 'Your's'.
structure
Shorten long sentences. Break ideas into shorter lines so it is easy to read.
structure
Make one idea in each paragraph. Put how you found out in one para, how you feel in another, and the plan to meet in a third.
tone
Keep a clear and kind tone. The message is happy and warm, which fits a friend.
tone
Warm and friendly tone that fits a personal letter.
content
It shows how you feel and your wish to meet for a celebration.
content
It tells how you learned the news and your plan to join.
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