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More and more companies are allowing employee to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Technology has increased by leaps and bounds. Now most of the
companies
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 are offering
the workers
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workers the
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to
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option to
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work
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 remotely. I think it is more negative than positive development. No doubt,
people
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 get
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flexibility
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the flexibility
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 of hours, and save money on commuting.
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,
people
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 feel isolated, lazy when they are working outside office hours. Some
people
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 think that
companies
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 should allow their
employees
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 to
work
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 from
their
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apply
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homes
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home
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. It will not only help to
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make
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 decisions
independantly
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independently
 but
also
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 make them more productive. It is common to see, those individuals who
work
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 remotely
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 can easily focus on their targets because they do not need any guidance to achieve company goals.
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,
people
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 can spend quality
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 with their loved ones
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 and understand what
are their desires
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their desires are
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. So, telecommuting helps to resolve
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family disputes as well.
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, homeworking offers
flexibility
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, and they do not need to spend money and
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commuting from one place to another.
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 teleworking has its own pros,
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the negative side can not be ignored. The first and foremost is
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people
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that people
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 become lazy when they know they have
flexibility
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 in hours. Even
they
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if they
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 use their
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on
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watching movies, playing games,
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it
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 makes their nature unproductive. Another is that
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people
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work
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 without the supervision of their managers. In
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 way, they can
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make
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 a lot of mistakes, and
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, they may face termination from the company if they
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 badly.
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, telecommuting increased the workload on the
employees
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.
Employees
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 become isolated
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 they hardly get enough
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 for themselves. As per the recent Canadian survey, more than half of Canadians felt 52.6% workload increased as compared to the past decades. All
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 happened
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 the competition faced by
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. In conclusion,
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 remote working provides
flexibility
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, independence, and family benefits, its drawbacks
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such
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 as isolation, lack of discipline, and increased
workload
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workload,
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 outweigh the positives.
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, I believe that telecommuting is more of a negative than a positive development for both
employees
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 and
companies
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.

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task response
The answer states a view and some points, but more clear proof and examples would help the task.
coherence cohesion
Your writing should have a plan: intro, 2 body parts with pros and cons, and a short ending that restates your view. Your ideas should be listed in order.
coherence cohesion
Use simple link words to show time and cause, e.g., first, then, also, but, however, in addition.
purpose
The writer states a clear view and ends with a decision.
content
Some good points on both sides and some examples.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work at home
  • remote work
  • home office
  • flexible
  • balance
  • time
  • money
  • commute
  • office
  • space
  • cost
  • team
  • communication
  • collaboration
  • trust
  • motivation
  • focus
  • isolation
  • security
  • privacy
  • data
  • policy
  • rules
  • hybrid
  • technology
  • meeting
  • video call
  • distraction
  • boundaries
  • stress
  • health
  • productivity
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