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Band 2.5

Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries has positive effects. Others say it would lead to the loss of national identities. Discuss and give your opinion.

We can't deny that we are living in
the
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 age where most people value integration more than ever before. When
countries
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 do more business together and share more culture, some people think
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 is a good thing that helps everyone.
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, other people worry that
this
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globalization
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globalisation
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 will make each country lose its special identity or unique way of life.
This
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bring
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brings
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 about countless advantages and disadvantages, which will be discussed
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as
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apply
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below. On the one hand, international business and cultural interaction not only help economic growth but
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 cooperation. In the era of
globalization
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globalisation
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,
countries
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prioritize
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prioritise
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 opening exchanges and trade, which creates
favorable
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favourable
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 conditions for exporting goods and attracting foreign investment. Not only that,
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countries
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but countries
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 can
also
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 cooperate to solve global problems together
like
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 climate change, global warming.
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, growth of international business and cultural links can
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 cause a country to lose its own
traditional
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traditions
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.
Young
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 generation
easily
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is easily
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exposure
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 to international
tendency
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tendencies
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and
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, and
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 that can be considered the reason
of
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for
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 the bad
habbit
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habit
 of
favoring
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favouring
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 foreign culture. In short,
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this
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 topic still
remain
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remains
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 a
controversal
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controversial
 question, my final conviction is that it still brings along advantages and disadvantages. What actually
matter
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matters
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 is that the
countries
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as
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, as
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 well as
individuals
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individuals,
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 have
a
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an
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 appropriate attitude towards
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 issue to
bringing
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 benefits to their nation.

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task response
Be clear in your view. State your main idea early and repeat it in the end.
coherence
Make each idea in its own part. Start with a topic sentence and use simple links to join ideas.
coherence
Give real examples for each point and explain how they help your view.
language
Check spelling and word choice. Use common words and short, clear sentences.
structure
The essay tries to discuss both sides and gives a clear final view.
content
There are some good ideas about trade and sharing culture.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • economic growth
  • cultural homogenization
  • national identity
  • cultural diversity
  • international trade
  • investment opportunities
  • tolerance
  • cultural preservation
  • traditional values
  • global influence
  • cultural dilution
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