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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

these
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 maps illustrate an industrial
area
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 located in Norbiton
town
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 and developments that are going to be planned in future.
Overall
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, the
town
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 will witness a significant change during
the
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this
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 time.
these
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These
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 main developments transform the industrial
area
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to
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into
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residential
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a residential
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area
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 and include
:
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apply
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 demolishing the factories and replacement of houses, constructing
of
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a new school,
amedical
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a medical
center
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centre
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, shops and
aplayground
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a playground
 and making a new square. As can be seen from the map,
initially
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town
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the town
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 was
a
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an
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 industrial
area
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 with factories around the main square. With the development of roads and their expansion to the North and Northwest of the
town
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, these factories are
demolished
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being demolished
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 and will be replaced by
new
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a new
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 residential
area
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.
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, a new square will be constructed in the south of the
town
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. New facilities
such
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 as a school,a playground, a medical
center
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centre
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 and shops will be
bulit
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built
 in the city to
make
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bring
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 more pleasure for
residants
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residents
.
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, farmlands will be shrunk
and
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, and
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 a new housing
area
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 will be constructed in the north of the city
and
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 a road over the river will be constructed as a bridge that will join
this
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area
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 to the city
center
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centre
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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