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Writing Samples
Band 5

The municipal corporation in the area where you live has decided to demolish a historical building to build a shopping center. Write a letter to the mayor of the corporation. In your letter: You have to explain why it is important to preserve the building suggest how the building can be used to benefit the local community.

Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to express my concern
for
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 the building which you
planned
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 to demolish to make a shopping centre. I am Daniel,
the
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 local resident of
this
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 area. I recently saw the news on
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Television that you want to destroy the beauty of our area by demolishing the historical building, and decided to make a shopping mall over there. As I mentioned earlier,
this
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 building has
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historical value. It gains
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popularity among tourists, and most
of
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tourists love to visit there because it
preserve
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 the historical things
such
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 as spinning
wheel
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wheels
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, coins, utensils, and
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weapons, which were used in the past. I must say that
this
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 building not only helps to boost the economy, but
also
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 benefits the community by selling souvenirs to tourists.
In addition
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, it contains cultural values that can be passed to our future generations. I hope you will consider my suggestions
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 reasonable and reconsider your decision. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon! Yours faithfully, Daniel.

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task response
Put your main idea in the first line. Give two clear reasons to keep the old building and offer one simple plan for its use.
coherence and cohesion
Make one idea per paragraph and use easy links like and, also, but to join ideas.
tone
Polite and formal tone.
content
Shows care for history and local place.
format
Uses greeting and close.
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