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The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart depicted the change of global learners at a British university
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among
 four different continents,
such
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 as
Asia
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, Africa, Europe and North America, in two decades.
Asia
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 expressed the most
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significant
 growth
while
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 North America
also
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 experienced
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 increasing trend.
In contrast
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, Europe
also
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 had unstable change
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 Africa
kept
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remain
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 unchanged in
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the first
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 decade and
then
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 had dramatic performance.
Asia
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 started at 60 at first and steadily soared to 120, so it was the most common
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 around these places. Meanwhile, North America demonstrated a dramatic movement which
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 to lower than 40 in 2005.
Then
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, it soared to almost 70 in 2015.
Moreover
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, Europe fluctuated in
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 twenty years.
Lastly
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, Africa
kept
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remained
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 at 20 in
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 decade and pushed to near 25 in 2010. But it
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decreased
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 to the starting point in 2015.
To conclude
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,
Asia
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 provided the most abundant students in
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 two decades.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "soared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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