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Band 2

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two
plan
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plans
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 illustrate how Grange
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park
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Park
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 has been changed since the year 2000.
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, numerous variations have
been happened
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occurred
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 after the substantial redevelopment of the
park
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. The diagrams show that seating areas have been changed and
now
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are now
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, it is presented in the
center
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centre
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 of
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park
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the park
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 around the rose garden. Before the seating
area
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, a fountain was located at that place. The stage
area
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 has been demolished
and
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, and
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 today an amphitheatre is present there, used for
the
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apply
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concerts. On the right
coner
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corner
 of
north
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the north
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 side, there was an
area
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 of ponds for water plants and a rose
gaden
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garden
have
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has
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 been modified
in
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into
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 a new cafe and a playground
area
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 for
children's
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children
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. After renovation,
glass
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the glass
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 house
which
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, which
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 was located in the right
coner
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corner
 of
south
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the south
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 side,
converted
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was converted
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in
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into
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 a water pond with some features.
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, there is an interesting location in both plans
that is
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entrance
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the entrance
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, which remained the same. Entrance is located on the
northen
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northern
 and the
south
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southern
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 side of the
park
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.
Moreover
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, a new entrance is
construced
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constructed
 near the water pond for the underground parking of the cars.

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task response
Fix the date in the task. The two plans are from 1920 and today. Keep one plan and tell what changed in a clear order.
coherence
Make a short intro and a short end. Say what you will tell and then sum up.
coherence
Use simple connect words like first, next, then, and, but to show how things change and to link ideas.
language
Check the small grammar and spell words right. Little mistakes can hide the meaning.
task response
Stick to the main changes. Do not add new ideas. Compare the two time times.
overview
The essay tries to show the big change in the park.
content
Many parts are named, like seats, pond, cafe, and gate.
comparison
It uses before/after to show change.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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