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Band 5.5

The bar chart below shows how exports from one country were transported in three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the information about
export
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 activities in one state by using different
mode
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modes
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 of
tranportation
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transportation
 between 2010 and 2012. The data
had
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was
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 given in
percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen clearly that the activity by
sea
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 had
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the hightest
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hightest porportion
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highest proportion
 in all the years.
On the other hand
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,
export
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 by air was
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at the
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the
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its
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 lowest ratio in 2012. In 2010,
export
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 by
sea
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 was 45%, and by road
was
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were
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 20% respectively.
Similarly
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, in 2011,
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export
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exports
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 by road
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decreased from 20% to 12%, but by air increased from 45% to 49%
subsequently
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.
Moreover
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, in 2012 , the percentage of activity by
sea
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 reached
at
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its peak
to
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of
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 55%, but the other modes decreased
as
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compared to previous years. Eventually,
it is clear that
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 the mode of transport by
sea
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 had the
porportation
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transportation
 used in one state.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, sea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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