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The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given line graph illustrates the annual average amount of money spent on cell
phone
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services
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 and residential
phone
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services
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 by US
consumer's
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consumers
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 from 2001 to 2010. Units are measured in US
Dollar
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dollars
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.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that
while
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 cell
phone
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services
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 rose, residential
phone
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 service dropped
down
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apply
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over the years. The line of the two
type
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types
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 of
phone
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 met the equilibrium point
in
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around 2006. In terms of cell
phone
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services
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, the expenditure
of
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on
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services
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 started at just above 200 in 2001. The cost constantly grew throughout the given period. It significantly increased
about
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 100 from 2006 to 2007. The line reached a peak of around 750 in 2010. Regarding the residential
phone
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services
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, the cost of service stood at just below 700 in 2001. Over 10 years, the expenditure on
this
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phone
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 service decreased by around 250. It experienced a drastic
fell
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fall
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 by approximately 100 between 2006 and 2007.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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