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Band 4.5

It is argued that university student should study a full range of subjects, instead of some specific subjects? To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is
concerned
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concerning
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That
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that
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 a high number of courses are supposed to be learned by academic learners, rather than particular ones.
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 essay is opposed to
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this
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 idea that a lot of fields of study ought to be passed. The details will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
Students
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 are
confronting
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 with a limited
time
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 and number of semesters.
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 to say, normally a university program will takes 4 years for undergraduates;
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, there is a restricted duration in order to complete it.
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, they should first complete
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the necessary
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 courses.
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,
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in
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 1990,
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 Iran, 50% of universities presented many subjects, which attendees had to attend, even though they took more than 4 years to finish them. Everyone has a different career goal.
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, individuals prepare themselves for a specific occupation;
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, they are expected to take part in relevant units,
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 of wasting
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 and energy on not required
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apply
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.
Students
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 have diverse talents;
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, they would be better off allocating their concentrations to promote their intrinsic abilities.
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, in 2015, in Japan, 75% of unnecessary college classes were eliminated.
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, the job market made an enormous progress in the whole country, because a vast majority of
young
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the young
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 workforce were busy with what they
interested
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were interested
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 in. In conclusion,
this
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 article does not support the thought that academic
students
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 are supposed to devote
time
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 to a
great
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wide
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 spectrum of modules as an alternative to several definite courses. The more productive
students
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 are,
The
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the
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 more
time
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 and ability they gain.

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task
Make the opening clear. State your view in one short line and keep to it.
content
Add strong, real examples that fit the point and are easy to check.
coherence
One main idea in each paragraph and use simple links to tie them.
coherence
Use easy linking words like first, also, but, so to connect ideas and show flow.
language
Check grammar and word use to fix mistakes.
conclusion
End with a short restate of your view.
strength
The essay shows a clear aim at the start and end.
strength
Numbers and places are used to show facts.
strength
The task is tried with a view to answer the question.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Holistic education
  • Critical thinking
  • Creativity
  • Interdisciplinary skills
  • Adaptability
  • Personal development
  • Academic motivation
  • Cultural awareness
  • Globalized world
  • Engaged learners
  • Well-rounded character
  • Diverse subjects
  • Career preparation
  • Knowledge base
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