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The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005.

The table illustrates how five Asian
countries
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consume
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consumed
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 four different fuel types to generate electricity in 2005.
Overall
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, Coal and lignite
become
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are
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 the highest
type
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types
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where
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that
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 Malaysia and
Singapore
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used
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use
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 to generate electricity.
On the other hand
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, South
Korea
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prefered
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preferred
 to use Hydro and wind,
Japan
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 chose nuclear, and
Thailand
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 used the other type.
Thailand
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 was the only country that did not use nuclear
.
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power.
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,
Japan
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become
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became
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 the highest country which used nuclear
to
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power to
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 generate electricity with 49 and was followed by South
Korea
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 with 33.
Singapore
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 and Malaysia
prefered
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preferred
used
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to use
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 Coal and lignite
to
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over
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 nuclear
,
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 they consumed nuclear by 13 and 19, respectively, and coal and lignite by 61 and 42, respectively.
Thailand
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 was the smallest user
in
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of
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 Coal and lignite by 3, which was followed by South
Korea
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 and
Japan
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 by 5 and 6. Most
countries
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except
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, except
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Thailand
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Thailand,
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 did not use Petroleum products.
Thailand
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 consumed
by
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apply
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36, but the other
countries
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 consumed no more than 3. Next type, Hydro and wind, South
Korea
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 used until 48,
whereas
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Thailand
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 used nearly 40
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per cent
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from
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of
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 the amount
of consuming
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consumed
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 in South
Korea
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.
Singapore
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as
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, as
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 well as
Japan
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only
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, only
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 used 3, but Malaysia used 2 more. All
countries
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 used the other types
,
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;
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 in
particularly
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,
Thailand
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 consumed more with 42.
Japan
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 and
Singapore
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 followed by 39, but the other
no
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had no
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 more than 15.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, singapore, korea, japan, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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