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A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her explain how to apply for the job

Hi Max, I hope you’re doing great. I wanted to write to you because you asked for
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apply
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help in
lending
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finding
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 a
job
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 in my country. First of all, I have heard of a
job
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 opportunity at a local
company
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 that might match
to
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your
requirement
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requirements
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. Not only does it give you
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good pay, but the work is
also
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 related to your field of interest. Plus, the work is a desk
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 where you will be managing the inventory for the
worforce
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workforce
 of the production department.
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, not physically demanding
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 will
fullfil
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fulfil
 your medical requirements as well. By the way,
this
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 is a multi-national
company
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 which has multiple opportunities coming up on
regular
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 basis which may be very fruitful for your career.
This
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 point is beneficial because
this
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 first time you are getting a
job
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 in the industry
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, and
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 if you
donot
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don't
 like your work environment or your
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 duties,
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 you can easily switch
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department
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 within the firm. One more thing before I forget — there are two ways of applying for the
job
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.
one
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 by applying online through the
company
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 website
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second
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the second
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,
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apply
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 by directly emailing your resume to the
company
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 HR. But, make sure to mention my name in the application as a referring person. If you want to know more about the
job
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 profile or the application procedure, just let me know. I’m happy to help whenever you need. Talk soon! Take care, Dhruvil

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grammar
Fix small grammar and word choice. For example, 'help in lending a job' should be 'help you find a job'.
clarity
Make the job description clear. Say what the desk work is and who will use the inventory.
structure
Use two or three short paragraphs. Put each main idea in its own paragraph.
mechanics
Check punctuation and capitalization. Use full stops and capital letters properly.
tone
Keep a friendly, natural tone for a letter to a friend. It is fine to be informal, but avoid long, hard-to-read lines.
content
The letter has a clear purpose and a friendly tone.
content
It gives how to apply and why the job fits the friend.
structure
Greeting and closing are present, which suits a friendly letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reputation
  • industry
  • duties and responsibilities
  • typical day
  • skills and experiences
  • job requirements
  • company culture
  • personality
  • work ethic
  • application process
  • job listing
  • submit an application
  • documents required
  • tailored resume
  • cover letter
  • relevant experiences
  • reviewing documents
  • practicing for interviews
  • promptly
  • deadlines
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