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Band 3

some university students went to learn about differnt subiects in addition to thier main things , other belived that it better to study on thier main things discuss both view

Some university students went to learn about other
different
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subjects
in addition
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 to their main
things
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subjects
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,
can
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which can
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 be caused by many
reason
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reasons
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.
By
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For
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 example, they might like to have a particular project in the future that links both subjects, or perhaps they are working in a company where the field is not their main subject. Or simply, they would like to have
better
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a better
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 understanding
in
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of
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 all things. Here I call it, Jack of all trades, master of none.
In
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other
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another
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 perspective, some scholars
also
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 believe that it's better to study their own area, without trying to learn anything else, which
also
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make
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makes
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 sense. There are a lot of academic
sholars
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scholars
 who
wants
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want
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 to
take
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speciality
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specialise
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 in their subject.
the
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 complete opposite of
Jack
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a Jack
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 of all trades.
This
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 is
master
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 of
one
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. There are
also
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 other reasons,
by
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for
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 example, university students have limited time to do only
one
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 subject, mastering
one
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 is already a challenge, let alone learn something else. In their point of view, they prefer to have good grades, graduate cumlaude in their main study than average grades in all
area
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. If we think about it, there is no right or wrong
in
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from
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 both
point
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points
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 of view. It always depends on what they're looking for in their learning journey. Their background could
also
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 be the reason why some students pick that
one
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 view.

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coherence
Add a clear topic sentence in each paragraph to show the plan and links between ideas.
task
Make your position clear in the end and give short reasons for it.
examples
Give more real or simple examples to back up points.
language
Check spelling and grammar; use 'For example' and fix 'By example', 'sholars' to 'scholars'.
content
The essay shows both views, meeting the task.
structure
A closing idea tries to show balance.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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