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Plastic bags, bottles, and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to slove this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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17 on keratinocytes is behind the
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Psoriasis–like
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 skin change seen
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in mice
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 given topical imiquimod. They draw on an “
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17 axis” in human psoriasis and on strong
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17A responses in keratinocytes when TNFα is present. In mice given imiquimod, the skin shows a dense neutrophile and monocyte infiltrate, but no one is sure yet which skin cell
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17 hits most, so they treat keratinocytes as the likely target.

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improvement
The text should not only rest the paper. Add your view. Explain what you think and why it matters.
structure
Give a clear plan. Write an intro to show what you will say. Then one or two body parts. Finish with a short end.
content
Use facts or examples from the essay or other knowledge to back your idea. Show why the topic is shown.
strength
The topic is clear and the notes show what paper is about.
strength
The sentences are short and easy to read.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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