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Band 2.5

Many people today prefer to socialise online rather than spend time with friends in the local community. To what extent do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Recent
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most
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, most
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of
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people
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 choose
interacting
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to interact
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 through online platforms rather
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face to
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than
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face
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face-to-face
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communication
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.
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this
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 trend has certain drawbacks, I believe
benefits
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the benefits
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 outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. One major advantage is convenience. No matter where you
are
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are,
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 you can contact
with
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apply
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your friends and family members
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at
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 any time you wish.
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Also
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communication
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do
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is
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 not
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limited
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 by distance or time.
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Additionally
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 it helps to maintain
relationships
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acroos
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across
 different countries and cultures.
People
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easily can
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can easily
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 expand their social network through
internet
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the internet
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 and make
frienships
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friendships
 and
relationships
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. Another crucial benefit is inclusivity.
People
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suffer
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 from social anxiety and shyness can easily communicate through online platforms. Recent research shows that
,
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people
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 who
are
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lack
of
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social skills actively
contributing
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contribute
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in
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to
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 online platforms and constantly
makes
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make
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 new connections. Despite all these advantages
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, socializing
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socializing
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socialising
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 online can
also
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has
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have
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 drawbacks
such
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lack
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a lack
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 of
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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communication
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 skills, temporary
relationships
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whick
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which
 do not
last
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 long. Despite frequent
chatting
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chatting,
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people
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 can
also
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 suffer from loneliness. Obviously, only live
communication
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 can improve
connection
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the connection
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 between
people
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 and help build more strong and
long-lasting
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longer-lasting
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relationships
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. In conclusion,
communication
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 online has drawbacks
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; nevertheless
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nevertheless
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nevertheless,
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 it
also
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help
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helps
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 to engage in social
relationships
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 easily.

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grammar
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structure
Plan your paragraph well. Use one idea per paragraph, have a clear topic sentence, and a short end sentence.
content
Add one or two clear examples to back your idea so the point is shown.
cohesion
Use linking words to show order and reason. Use 'also', 'but', 'however', 'therefore'.
content
The writer has a clear view and says the pros and cons
structure
There is a hint of a plan with intro and conclusion
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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