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the graph show the map of islip center. describe it

the graph show the map of islip center. describe it
The maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the current layout of
islip
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Islip
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town
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center
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centre
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 and the plan for its proposed
development
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 in the future.
Overall
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 ,it can be observed that a major transformation with
addition
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the addition
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 of amenities and
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development
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the development
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of
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road
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 networks is proposed in the future plan. Meanwhile,
few
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a few
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 locations
such
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a
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as a
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school ,
park
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 and
shops
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 along the main
road
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 will be unchanged or resized. In the current layout, a
mainroad
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main road
 is located in the centre and has
shop
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shops
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 along both sides. The main
road
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 is connected to a
park
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 to the southeast. Meanwhile,
housing
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the housing
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area
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 is located across the
shops
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 in the centre of the
town
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.
Moreover
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, a school is located in the southwest
on
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of
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 the
town
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. In the proposed plan, the main
road
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 in the
center
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centre
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 will be converted into a footpath. The
shops
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 to the south of the footpath and school to the southwest of the
town
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 will stay the same,
whereas
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 there will be
development
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 of
Bus
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a Bus
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 station,
Car
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a Car
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park
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 ,
Shopping
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a Shopping
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center
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centre
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 and
housing
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a housing
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area
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 to the north of the
foot path
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footpath
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. Meanwhile, the housing
area
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 across the
shops
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 on
south
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the south
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 side will be relocated to the west.
Moreover
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, the
area
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 occupied by the
park
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 will be reduced for the construction of
carriageway
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the carriageway
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 .There will be
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development
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the development
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 of a dual carriageway, which will house these amenities inside it.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, development, road, park, shops, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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