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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people consider price as most important thing to consider when buying a product or service. Do you agree or disagree ?

In
this
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 modern
epoach
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epoch
, it is undeniable that shopping habits among
people
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 are increasing. Society
argue
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argues
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 that price is the
foremest
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foremost
 thing before buying the product.
However
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, I agree with
this
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 notion to some extent. In
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 paragraphs,
i
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I
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 will explain my views and give the relevant conclusion. To embark on, some companies manufacture their product only to earn huge profit by blurring the quality and specifications. To
site
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cite
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 an example, there are named brands in
industry
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the industry
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 like Burberry, they have great goodwill in
market
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the market
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, they sell the things with extra
margine
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margin
.
Comparitively
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Compared
, the local brands sell the same quality
more
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is sold more
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cheaper
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cheaply
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 with almost a difference of half. Another aspect to consider, nowadays, everyone is saving more for
future
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the future
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due to
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unexpexted
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unexpected
 warnings like Covid.
Also
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, folks
facing
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are facing
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 high living costs and expenses in their daily chaos
due to
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 modernisation. It
result
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results
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 in preference of
people
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to
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preferring to
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spent
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spend
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 less
amount
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apply
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.
For example
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, many indians face starvation during
covid
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COVID
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 lockdowns because they did not have savings even
though
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apply
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for
very
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the very
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 next day. On the other side, numerous
of
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apply
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people
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 prefer quantity, quality and
time saving
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time-saving
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 things
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while
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when
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it come
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come
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comes
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 to
spendings
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spending
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. To more
precise
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precisely
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it
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apply
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, when it comes to health services,
people
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 do not care about the price.
Instead
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, they find
best
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the best
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 doctor in town
even
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, even
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he
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though he
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 is more expensive. Society
prefer
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prefers
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best
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the best
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 services
as compare
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compared
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 to cheaper
because
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ones because
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 of
benefits
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the benefits
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. To illustrate,
majority
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the majority
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 of individuals believe in the
gurranty
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guarantee
 of things like electronics, vehicles. They chose the extended warranty by paying extra. To wrap up, I personally believe that money is
most
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the most
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 important thing
but
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, but
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 other areas
also
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having
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have
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 a huge impact on the product or services for the
people
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 who have
high
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a high
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 status in
the
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apply
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society.

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structure
Make ideas flow with clear topic sentences and linking phrases. Use one main idea per paragraph and connect them with words like first, then, also, so, however.
content
Be clear about your position in the start and in the end. Some sentences repeat or drift away. Stick to the point and explain why you agree (to what extent).
content
There is an attempt to compare price with value and to give examples.
content
The essay shows effort to state a view and to support it with ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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