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Many people think that the government should spend more money on providing faster and cheaper means of public transport. Some others think that there are other important factors to take into consideration like (petrol, cost and environment). Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Nowadays, some
people
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 believe the
government
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 should give extra funds
on
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to
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 public
transportations
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transportation
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 because it will be beneficial for residents. Meanwhile, others argue there are
nomerous
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numerous
 essential issues
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such
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, such
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 as petrol
,
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apply
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 and
environment
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the environment
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 need to be solved by
goverments
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governments
. I believe,
although
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 infrastructures are important to elevate the economy,
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the environtment
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environtment
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environment
also
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 has benefits for
community
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the community
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both viewpoints and give my personal opinions.
To begin
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 with, Infrastructure is important for every
countries
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country
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.
it
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It
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provide
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provides
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 benefits for the
government
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 and
people
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.
First,
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infrastructure will increase
economy
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the economy
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, because
a
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huge and massive movement
from
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of
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people
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 and goods.
In addition
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, more companies will gain profits and will pay more taxes to the
government
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.
Secondly
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,
its
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it's
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 beneficial for residents, because there are numerous options of public
transportations
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transportation
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 and
provide
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provides
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snowball-effects
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snowball effects
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 for the economy.
For example
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, with good public
transportations
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transportation
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,
people
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 will more easily to purchase goods from
other
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another
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 city.
On the other hand
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,
environment
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the environment
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 has a pivotal role
for
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in
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 sustainable development. There are many
disanvantages
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disadvantages
from
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of
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 global warming which can
affects
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affect
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 any
countries
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country
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. Every
government
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 should spend more on environmental preservation projects.
For instance
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, the
government
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 of Indonesia spend more than 15
billions
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billion
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 rupiah to construct green
belt
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belts
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 on several geoparks in Indonesia. Indonesia has serious
concern
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concerns
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 about global warming, and
they
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it
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 should mitigate
detrimental
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the detrimental
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 effects in the future from
this
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 issue. In conclusion,
although
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 public transportation is essential for economic growth, the
goverment
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government
 should consider
to protect
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protecting
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 the
environtment
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environment
.
Moreover
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, the
government
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 should develop regulations to
prioritize
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prioritise
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their fund
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its funds
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, because
they
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it
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 should spend
their
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its
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 money wisely.

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task response
Be clear about your view in the intro and keep a steady line through the essay.
coherence
Make each paragraph focus on one main idea and give a simple example to support it.
grammar
Fix basic grammar, spelling, and use short, simple sentences.
lexical resource
Use only common, easy words and link ideas with easy joining words.
structure
The essay has a plan with clear four parts: intro, two bodies, and conclusion.
content
It talks about both sides and gives your own view.
example
Some good examples are used to show points.
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