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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS Bar Chart

The bar chart illustrates the average number of
hours
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 spent on leisure activities in August 2019 in Greece.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there were noticeable changes recorded over the period. One category showed an increase,
while
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 the others showed a slight decline.
In addition
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, the chart shows that the highest figures were seen in reading books ,
whereas
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 visiting
places
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 had the lowest values ​​during
this
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 year. Looking at the chart for more details, visiting
places
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 increased gradually from 1 hour in Chinese tourists to 2
hours
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 in Brazilian tourists, and at the beach fluctuated between 3, 4, 5, and 6
hours
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. Reading books experienced a climb during the same period. In comparison, reading books consistently performed better than visiting
places
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, with the highest value recorded for reading at 8
hours
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,
while
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 visiting
places
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 had the lowest at 1 hour throughout the year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, places with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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