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The chart shows the number of international students studying at UK university between 1995 and 2015

The line graph demonstrates the number of how many
students
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study
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who study
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 from abroad over the
20 years
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20-year
period
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.
Overall
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, the number of
students
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 from Asia was growing throughout the
period
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increasing
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, increasing
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 rapidly. Africa and Europe followed
the
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a
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 similar trend. North America remained stable throughout the
period
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 , increasing rapidly in the end. As the graph shows, at
UK
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a UK
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 university studied 60
students
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in
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studied in
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 1995.
Then
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, it increased rapidly to 120 in 2015. Regarding North America there studied 40
students
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in
Verb problem
were studied in
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 1995.
This
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 figure fell
out
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apply
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to 30 in 2005, but
then
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 it grew to 40 in 2010.
Afterward
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,
this
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 figure climbed sharply to around 70 in 2015. 
By contrast
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, the
students
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 from Africa and Europe followed
the
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a
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 similar trend
in
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over
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 the
20 years of
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20-year
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period
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. In Europe between 1995 and 2015, the number showed minor fluctuations, climbing from 45 to 50. In
relations
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relation
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 to,
students
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 from Africa stayed constant at 20from 1995 to 2005, but in 2010 it jumped to 30.
Then
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, decreased to 20 in 2015, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international
  • student
  • studying
  • university
  • UK
  • number
  • figure
  • year
  • start
  • end
  • rise
  • increase
  • growth
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • steady
  • change
  • trend
  • more
  • less
  • region
  • country
  • main
  • share
  • total
  • compare
  • data
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