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Band 4.5

The charts below show the average temperatures in 12 months in three cities and how many hours of sunshine these cities have in a year.

The given line graph and table demonstrate yearly temperature and
how
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apply
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much length of sunshine
have
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in the course of 12
month
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months
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.
Overall
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, even though all 3 countries fluctuated throughout the surveyed period, all witnessed slight or zero changes. The most sunshine had NY city,
while
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 the opposite was true for London. Observing the
detail
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 of
graph
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, it is evident that Sydney started at nearly 23, before
failing
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 to 15,
then
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 surging to approximately 26.
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, the ratio for
new york city
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New York City
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 stood at 5, after which
experienced
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 a drastic rise by 25, before reaching just under 10. There was a significant rise ranging between roughly 8 and 25, from January to July,
then
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teh
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the
 figures for London saw a dramatic decline by 15
at the end
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 of
the
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December. As for the table, the quantity of sunshine in London had the smallest share among the presented regions,
whereas
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new york
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New York
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 underwent the opposite, taking the vast majority, which was followed by Sydney reaching 2535 and 2473, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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