The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in foreign language in different countries.

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illutrates

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illustrates

the foreign

language

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proficiency

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percentage of

students

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in different countries.

Overall

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, Female

students

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have more foreign

language

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proficiency

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in all countries

exept

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except

for Thailand. Female

students

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are more proficient in foreign

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language

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languages

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compare

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to their male counterparts, with Indian female

students

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having nearly 70%

proficiency

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. Romanian female

students

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around 65%

proficiency

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Russian and

Vietnemes

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Vietnamese

female

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who have

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around 45% and 55% respectively.

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Chinese

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female

students

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have around 30%

proficiency

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and

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Thai female

students

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having

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a percentage lower than their male counterparts at around 35%. Other than Thailand, most male

students

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have lower

proficiency

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foreign

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a foreign

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language

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compare

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compared

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to their female classmates. Indian

men

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having

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proficiency

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of around 65%, with Romanian

men

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exceeding 40%. Russian and Vietnamese

men

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having

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similar

proficiency

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with both around 35%. Thai male

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being

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the only category that

exeeded

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exceeded

their female

counterpart

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counterparts

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at nearly 30%.

Lastly

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, Chinese

men

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having

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have

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the lowest percentage among all categories at around 15%.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in foreign language in different countries.

You were absent from an important event held by the company you work for. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Apologize for your absence and explain the reasoning. Explain why you had to be at the other event. Explain what you will do to catch up.

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Some people think that news has no connection with people’s lives; so it is a waste of time to read newspapers and watch television news programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Your friend is asking for your advice. He is going to university and can't decide whether to study music or business management. Write a letter - How you felt when you got the letter - What the good points are for both sides and - What your advice is

Some people think that schools should concentrate on academic courses which are useful to the career of students; courses like music and sports are not useful and therefore should not be offered. To what extent do you agree or disagree?