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The graph shows estimated oil production capacity for several Gulf countries between 1990 and 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the capacity of oil output per day in six different countries (Iraq, Kuwait,
Qatar
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, Saudi Arabia, and
UAE
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the UAE
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) from 1990 to 2021, measured
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millions
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.
Overall
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,
while
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Qatar
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 showed a minor fluctuation,
other
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the other
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 five nations increased throughout the period. Notably, Saudi Arabia
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 the highest over the period. Saudi Arabia, which began at just over 8
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millions
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 in the first two years, experienced a significant growth, peaking at slightly over 14
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millions
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 in 2010.
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,
Qatar
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 produced around one million
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 day of oil during the period. The lowest capacity among all six nations.
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 Iraq, Kuwait, and
UAE
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the UAE
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 increased gradually from around 2
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millions
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 to approximately 4
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millions
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. In terms of Iran,
accounted
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 for 3
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millions
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 in 1990 and
ending
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 with slightly over 4
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millions
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million
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, overtaking Iraq, Kuwait,
Qatar
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, and
UAE
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the UAE
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words qatar, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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