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The charts below show ưhat UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

The bar charts present the
number
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 of graduate and postgraduate students who decided to go with different options after their graduation
like
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, like
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 doing
part - time
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a part-time
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 job ,
voluntaring
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volunteering
, continuing their
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study
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studies
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, and staying unemployed in 2008 in
UK
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the UK
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.
It is clear that
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 the
biggest
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largest
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number
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 of
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graduates
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graduate
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 students decided to continue their
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study
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studies
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,
whereas
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 the smallest
number
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 of them volunteered. The same trend
found
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is found
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 with the
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postgraduates
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postgraduate
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 students
most
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, most
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 of them go
further
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 with their
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study
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studies
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and
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, and
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least
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a least
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 of them
doing
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do
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voluntaing
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volunteering
 work. 29,665
graduates
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 continued their
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study
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studies
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but
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, but
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 17,735 of them decided to do part
time
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part-time
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 job.
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However
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However,
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 2.725
postgraduates
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studed
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studied
 more after their
dgree
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degree
 and only 2,535
choose
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chose
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 to do
part - time
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a part-time
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 job. There are a
big
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large
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number
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 of
graduates
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were
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who were
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 unemployed in
2008
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2008,
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 compared to only 1,625
of
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apply
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postgraduates
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did
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who did
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 not have any source of income. It is notable
is
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apply
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that
,
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apply
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 only 345
of
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apply
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postgraduates
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 liked to do some
voluntaing
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volunteering
 work compared to 3,500
of
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apply
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graduates
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liked
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who liked
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 to do it.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, study, graduates, postgraduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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