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These days, world leaders of all kinds are younger than in the past, What are the reasons? ls this a negative or a positive trend?

Nowadays, young
people
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has
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have
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 become
a
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apply
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successful
leader
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leaders more
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quicker
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quickly
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 than in the past because
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of an
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an
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the
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advance
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advances
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of
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in
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 technology,
that
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which
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let
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allows
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people
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access
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to access
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 information easily. I think it is a very positive
trend
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, I will elaborate
why
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on why
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this
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trend
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come
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comes
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 from, and why I think
is
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it is
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 a good thing for governments.
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 with,
internet
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the internet
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 changes the world to let us
can
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apply
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access information
for
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at
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anytime
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any time
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.
This
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 means
people
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 can gain the
knowleadges
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knowledge
 more than in the past.
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, ten years ago
people
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need
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needed
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 to go to
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the libeary
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libeary
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library
 to read and take a long time to learn something new, but now
people
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 can learn from
every where
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everywhere
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 through
device
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devices
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, and
also
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 they can connect to an expert
through send
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by sending
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E-mail
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an email
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.
Thus
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,
this
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 means
people
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 can
devolope
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develop
 their
knowleage
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knowledge
eaiser
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more easily
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 than in the past, and easier to be successful.
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, the other good thing is
young
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that young
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people
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has
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have
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 a long life.
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this
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 means they can take a risk or try to do something new more than
old
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older
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people
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. So, cause
this
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trend
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 government might get a lot of
an
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apply
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effient
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efficient
worker
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workers
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 in the
econoic
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economic
 system.
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,
young
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a young
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 leader has
a
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an
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advance
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advanced
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 vision, and a long life. So, the government might organise them to lead their country. In conclusion, I think young
leader
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leaders
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more
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shining more
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 and more
shine
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apply
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is a good
trend
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. Because an advance of technology. It affects to government.

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overall
Plan your essay. Start with your view in the first line. Then give 2 or 3 clear reasons, each with a short example. End with a short conclusion.
language
Use correct word form and spelling. Check form like access, knowledge, everywhere. Keep simple words.
structure
Link ideas with simple words: first, also, but, in addition. Use clear order in paragraphs.
content
The writer shows a clear view that tech helps people access information.
structure
There is an attempt to have a plan with an intro, body, and conclusion.
content
The topic is kept in mind and linked to government impact.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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