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The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information.

The
digram
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 provides key information about
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acceptence
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acceptance
 procedures for
a
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apply
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high school graduates to join a university .
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, it is clear from the graph that the steps are long and complicated .
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 , there are
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plenty of prerequisite tasks to move on with your admission application. Starting with obtaining
high
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a high
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 school degree . And ending with
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acceptence
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acceptance
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and compete
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compete
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complete
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 enrolment.
According to
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 what is shown, earning a high degree certificate is
a
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apply
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manadatory
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mandatory
 to initiate your request. followed by completing the application form
onilne
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online
 through the university website .
Then
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,
transilating
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 your form is required before submitting to the admin . In
this
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 stage, there are two scenarios
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. If
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 the
applicationd
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application
 is refused ,
then
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 you have
two
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to
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 resubmit your order with
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a different
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 course.
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, it will
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be transfered
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transfered
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transferred
 for
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acceptence
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acceptance
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and compete
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compete
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complete
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 enrolment. In terms of
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acceptence
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acceptance
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further
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, further
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 steps
,
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apply
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it
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apply
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will
takes
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 around 2 weeks to decide
for
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on
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the appliacation
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appliacation
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application
 status . Afterwards, you will be redirected to choose your own courses and most
importantley
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importantly
 registering with the Dean.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words acceptence with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • procedure
  • university entry
  • high school graduates
  • application process
  • admission requirements
  • selection criteria
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