Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others beilieve that the purpose of the museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Certain individuals are of the opinion that
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are meant for entertainment. Others,
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, think that
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places are used for educational purposes. I think the latter holds more water. The essay below will discuss both views and
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give a conclusion. Some people think visiting
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is just for entertainment. They can spend the whole day taking beautiful pictures of displayed things. Some even buy paintings from the
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to decorate their homes. They do all
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to entertain themselves.
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, certain studies reveal that about 30% of individuals who visit
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go there to spend time and take beautiful pictures just to keep memories.
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doing all
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, they still learn something unknowingly.
On the other hand
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, others are of the opinion that
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are built to educate people. I agree with
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notion because most of them keep historical stories that are used to educate the public. Foreigners and students usually go there to learn about the place. To exemplify, in Zimbabwe, learners sometimes visit
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,
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as the one at Matopo
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. The tour guides teach them about the history of the place and everything on display.
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, there is more information written on the frames.
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, visitors can read on their own.
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, I think
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are meant for educational purposes. People should visit them not for
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entertainment
but to learn.
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, citizens should be
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taught
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the importance and purpose of
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buildings.

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planning
Plan your ideas. Say both sides, then give your own view in the last part.
coherence
In each paragraph, say one main idea and show why it matters.
grammar
Check small grammar and spell. Fix easy mistakes.
examples
Use clear and real examples from museum life to show your point.
conclusion
End by restating your view and why you choose it.
strength
Clear stance and plan.
strength
Effort to give examples.
strength
Idea flow between parts is good.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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