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Writing Samples
Band 5

You have just read an article in an inernational travel magazie which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazie. IN your letter - Correct the information in the article - Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to bring your attention towards an
article
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 in your newspaper
'
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,
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The
tribune
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Tribune
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'
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. You have published an
article
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 about my hometown in an effort to provide a bit
exposure
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of exposure
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 about it to
vistors
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visitors
. Well,
while
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 I appreciate
the
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your
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 noble effort
of
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yours
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, I regret to inform you that there is a factual error in your
article
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 that requires immediate correction. The
article
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 mentioned that Himalaya town is situated in the southern
side
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part
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 of India,
whereas
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 it is a famous landmark in the
north
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northern
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side
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part
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 of India. The place attracts thousands of tourists
around
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from around
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 the world in my country. Your magazine is popular in the world, and providing incorrect information to the readers is critical in order to intact
the
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its
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 reputation
of
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apply
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it
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apply
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.
Moreover
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, inaccurate details lead to
create
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creating
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confussion
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confusion
, disappointment, and even a negative travel experience. To rectify
this
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, I kindly suggest that you publish a correction in your magazine's next
article
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 about the previous mistake so that the prospective tourists cannot get confused about the location of
Himalaya
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the Himalaya
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. I am looking
to
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forward to
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 your positive consideration. Yours faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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task response
Explain the task in one spot: tell what is wrong, why it matters, and what you want the mag to do. Keep it short. Put each idea in its own line or paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Make the flow of the letter clearer. Use a simple order: state the error, then why it matters, then what to fix. Use short sentences and clear words.
tone
Polite and formal tone.
purpose
Clear your goal to fix the article.
structure
Nice start with Dear Sir or Madam and closing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • correct
  • wrong
  • fact
  • article
  • editor
  • readers
  • town
  • place
  • event
  • day
  • month
  • year
  • distance
  • near
  • old
  • new
  • source
  • check
  • verify
  • update
  • online
  • print
  • apology
  • error
  • fix
  • idea
  • suggest
  • respond
  • report
  • future
  • trust
  • help
  • local
  • official
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