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The diagram below shows the plans show the ground floor of the library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the lower level of the library in the year 2001, and it
also
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 shows the improvement and redevelopment of it in 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the places of some rooms did not change, and we can see that the size of a few quarters has decreased,
and
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that
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which
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 led to having so many classes on the floor.
According to
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 the data, the fiction section in 2001
has
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changed to tables in 2009, and near
them
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them,
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 a children's area
has been
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was
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 added, and
in addition
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 to that, more tables were there, but
the
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their
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shape
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of
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them
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changed from cubes to
rectangulars
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rectangles
. As for the history and self-help, they put in extra courses,
such
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 as kitchen, law, and economics.
On the other hand
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, as we mentioned before, the location of several sessions has not been moved: the stairs, the
librarian
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librarian's
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 desk, computer lectures, and films and DVDs.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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