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The chart showes the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015

The line graph compares four
various
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regions in terms of how many
students
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 studied at UK
university
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universities
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 from 1995 to 2015
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,the four regions experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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students
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 from Asia and North America rose with some fluctuations,African and European ones remained unchanged over time As the graph shows,Asia’s
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students figure
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student figures
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 started at 60 in 1995.
Then
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,the
proportions
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proportion
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 of them in the UK
university
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universities
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 gradually increased to 120 over the next 20 years.Regarding North America’s ones,in
1995
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1995,
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were accepted 40
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,for the next year stated steady and
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 it followed
by
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a small decrease to around 30
in
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2005.Afterwards,the figures
subsequently
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 jumped to 70 in 2015.
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,the
students
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 from Europe experienced rapid fluctuations from 1995 to 2015
and
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 in the end, the indicator remained unchanged.The African figure
leveled
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 off at 20 between 1995 and 2005,but
then
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 it climbed to 30 in 2010,after it plunged to below 20 in 2015.

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tip
Make one clear view at the start that tells what the four regions do in the time 1995 to 2015, then back it up with exact numbers.
strategy
Use short, plain lines for each region. Start with a topic line then add the data.
tip
Link ideas with small words like and, but, so, then. Avoid long, loose sentences.
error-correction
Fix small grammar and match the tense in the whole paragraph.
strategy
End with a short finish that restates the big change in the four regions.
strength
The essay shows the idea of comparing areas.
strength
Numbers are given for most regions to show change.
strength
The attempt to use an overview is clear.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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