The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The pie charts provide information on how much electricity is generated in 5 different ways in Australia and France from 1980 to 2000. The amount sourced
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measured in units.
Overall
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, the Australians mostly relied on
energy
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from coal in
both
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years,
whereas
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the French were heavy on the usage of nuclear
energy
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to power their country. In Australia,
energy
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production rose from 100 in 1980 to 170 in 2000. Coal had an increase from 50 to 130 in
both
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years. Natural
gas
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and hydropower
both
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accounted for 20 each in the first year
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however
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, hydropower usage boosted to 36 in 2000,
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both
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oil and natural
gas
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experienced a decline in supply to 2. The French in 1980
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generally generated 90 of electrical power, with coal and natural
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accounting for 25 each. In
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the year
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2000, their total production was doubled to 180, with a heavy reliance on nuclear
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, which produced 126 from the
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production. Fuel from
both
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water and natural
gas
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,
however
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, saw a decline to 2.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, both, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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