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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success.” Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

Many people tend to
belive
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believe
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 most of the
success
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 comes from
luck
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. They see only the outcome
not
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, not
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 the
hardwork
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hard work
 and dedication that has been
gave upon
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given
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. I
partitally
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partially
belive
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believe
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 in
this
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 statement. A little amount of
luck
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 can play
huge
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a huge
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 role in
overall
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success
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. On one
hand
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hand,
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 there is no doubt,
main
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the main
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 goal
achivement
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achievement
 comes from a lot of
work
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 and tiring hours of involvement. Without
this
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, it is impossible to
achive
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achieve
 anything near
success
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 if no
luck
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involved
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is involved
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.
Succscessful
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Successful
 athletes around the globe
is
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are
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 the main representation of hard
work
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 and great contribution to one cause.
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, famous figure skater Illia Mallinin made a world
breaking
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record. He is the first male figure skater who landed a Quadruple Axel jump that has never been
considrered doeable
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considered doable
 in a
competetion
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competition
. He had
particularly
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a particularly
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 exceptional passion involved where he pushed his body limits by putting a lot of
hardwork
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hard work
 and made that
unbelivable
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unbelievable
 jump.
This
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 is
also
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 where
luck
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 seems to be given
him
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to him
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 by the means of body proportions.
This
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let
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lets
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 him tuck in very hard to
achive
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achieve
this
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 amount of rotations in the air.
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, there are some people who
seems
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seem
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 to put zero effort
in
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into
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 making something of their own but
still
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are still
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being
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successful.
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, many of the entrepreneurs and
bussuinnes
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business
man
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men
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 who
achived
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achieved
 great
businneses
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businesses
, seem likely to pass their legacy to their children
at the end
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 of their
life time
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lifetime
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. These children could be expected as
a
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an
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 inheritance of their
success
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 where no contribution is involved. Another example of one's triumph where only
luck
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 could be considered as the main reason
of
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for
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 the
success
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 is
lotterly
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lottery
 prizes. There is no need
of
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for
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 anything
extra
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more
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 than
particpation
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participation
 in
this
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 game,a car or a big amount of money could be won.
This
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 is
true
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a true
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 example where only
luck
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 can make you
achive
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achieve
 and make you win in
this
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 game In conclusion,
i
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I
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belive
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believe
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 most of the
work
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 is
achived
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achieved
 by hard
work
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,
despite
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although
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luck
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could
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can also
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 be considered
as
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apply
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a
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an
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 important part of the victory
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apply
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also
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. I think anyone could get
succesful
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successful
 if they truly want and dedicate themselves
in
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to
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tip
Plan before you write. Say your view clearly in the first line.
tip
Use short, calm sentences. Break long lines into 2 or 3 small ones.
tip
Finish with a short end that restates your view.
strength
You show you know the task and try to speak on both sides.
strength
You use some linking words like On one hand and On the other hand.
strength
You give examples to back your idea, even if they are not strong.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Persistence
  • Diligence
  • Effort
  • Performance
  • Competitive fields
  • Practice
  • Talent
  • Serendipitous
  • Opportunities
  • Timing
  • Privilege
  • Connections
  • Inherited
  • Networks
  • Entrepreneurs
  • Right place at the right time
  • Preparation
  • Opportunity
  • Lucky breaks
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