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The pie chart below show the revenue from 5 industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050. SUmmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart illustrates the
information
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 on the income generated by five companies in Tago in 2000 and expectations for revenue in 2050. In overview, the highest amount was earned by the
information
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 service,
while
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 the prediction for the future semiconductor business will be well-renowned.
In addition
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, the life insurance industry in both years is getting a very low amount. On the one hand, in 2000, the upward trend in the food industry and
information
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 service business accounted for 25 billion.
However
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, in 2050, the
information
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 services declined by 15%, and
Correct article usage
the beverages
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beverages
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beverage
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 company will earn the same income.
On the other hand
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, the semiconductor agencies increase, which is $126 of the $196
billions
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billion
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.
In contrast
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, the real estate services are slightly increased in 2050, which is $25. The life insurance income in 2000 was 12 billion, but it is estimated
decreased
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to have decreased
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 by 2 billion in 2025.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words information with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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