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Band 3.5

The main purpose of public libraries should to provide books. Public libraries should not spend their limited resources on computer software, videos. To what extent do you agree or disagree

The primary focus of general libraries should be providing
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 they should not invest
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 computer
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programs
 or videos. I personally disagree with
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 and will discuss the reasons why in the following paragraphs.
Books
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 are a great source of knowledge, but are limited and have very
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 access.
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, is it better to have a number of
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 in hand, or a
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 variety of them digitally on the screen? Libraries have a
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 capacity,
whereas
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upcomming
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upcoming
 technology gives you unlimited access to numerous different
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 of
books
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, for far less monthly payments comparatively. These apps not only make it cheaper but
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 give
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 experience, by providing a motion picture to the storyline written in novels. Ultimately, making it more enjoyable, especially for
the ones
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 who are not fond of reading.
Secondly
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, having these input data systems
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 can prove to be very
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convenient
.
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, one would not need long hours of reading, as the videos can give a shorter version of lengthy content.
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, it
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 saves the
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hassle
 of going around an array
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 looking for a particular hard copy. Searching the required text on the computer in seconds by merely typing in the name
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 can prove to be both
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 easier and less
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time-consuming
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,
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books
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 are a priority, contributing
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 the advancement of technology is equally important. I believe
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 a balanced investment in the traditional style
books
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 and technical sources can make the whole experience worthwhile.

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Task Response
Be clear on your view. Start with a short statement that says if you agree or not. Then give reasons that fit that view only. Use one idea per paragraph and end with a short conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make the idea flow easy. Use a simple plan: intro, body 1, body 2, body 3, conclusion. Use link words like first, also, but, so, in the end. Check that each paragraph has one main idea and stick to it.
Task Response
You show a plan to mix books and digital tools.
Coherence and Cohesion
You use linking words to connect ideas.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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