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The pie charts below show the different types of courses, which were followed by the students during the years of 1984, 1994 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the different types of courses, which were followed by the students during the years of 1984, 1994 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given pie graphs illustrate the changes in
courses
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 followed by students from 1984 to 2004, like mixed media
courses
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, face-to-face
courses
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, correspondence
courses
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, and online
courses
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.
Overall
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, the number of
courses
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 followed by students witnessed a significant fluctuation in four
courses
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.
While
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 the figures for face-to-face
courses
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 are the highest, the opposite is true of online
courses
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. In terms of the online
courses
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, there was a slight rise from 0% to 11%
units
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 between 1984 and 1994, but it tended to decrease from 11% in 1994 to 10% in 2004. In correspondence
courses
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, it remained unchanged from 1984 to 1994 by 20%. There was a dropped slowly by 5%
units
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 from 20% to 15%. Regarding the data for
courses
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, face-to-face
courses
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 witnessed a decline between 1984 and 2004
units
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 from 67% to 40%. Ultimately, the statistics of online
courses
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,
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 showed a significant rocket of 11% from 1984 to 1994. The figures decreased from 11% to 10%
units
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 between 1994 and 2004.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words courses, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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