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The diagram shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.

The diagram provides information about
production
Correct article usage
the production
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 of coffee and sales preparation for Supermarkets and Shops.
Overall
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, production's stages consist of 11 steps, and the process
include
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includes
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 roasting, cooling, and freezing the coffee
beans
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.
To begin
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 with, the farmers
picking
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pick
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 a
high quality
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high-quality
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of
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coffee bean from several farm fields. Afterwards, they will put whole
beans
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 under exposure
of
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to
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 the sunlight to make them dry before they
roasted
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roast
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it
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them
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under
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at
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 certain temperatures. After a
long term
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long-term
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of
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roasting process, the
beans
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 will
get cooling
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cool
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 rapidly. Next step is
,
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to grind, beans
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beans
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 will be grinded and mix them with hot water and
strains
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strain
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 the mixture to obtain high quality
of
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mixtures
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mixture
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. Final processes
is
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are
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 freeze mixture will be
grind
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ground
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 and
dry it
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dried
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 in a vacuum.
Final
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The final
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 stage is the packaging of those mixtures into a jar, and the
productions
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products
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 will
get
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be
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transfered
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transferred
 to
supermarket
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supermarkets
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 and shops immediately.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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