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Band 1

This is a diagram on the topic of how to pu’erh tea is made.

The given flowchart diagram illustrates the steps of making puerh raw and ripe
tea
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. The main component of the
tea
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, which is the
tea
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 leaf, is
pan fried
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pan-fried
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 for
enzymes
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enzyme
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 deactivation
,
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apply
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 before being rolled and left
dried
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to dry
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 under direct sunlight. After that, the dried
tea
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 is called loose raw
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, which can be compressed to get raw
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 or
underwent
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undergo
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mold
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mould
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 fermentation to achieve loose ripe
tea
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. 
Furthermore
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, before attaining
final
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the final
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 product of vintage pu-erh raw
tea
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, the raw
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 needs to be stored for
aging
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ageing
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.
On the other hand
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, the loose ripe
tie
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 is compressed to obtain consumable pu-erh ripe
tea
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task response
Say what the chart shows at the start, then list the steps in order, and finish with a short note on aging.
coherence
Use words that show order: first, next, then, after that, finally.
accuracy
Be clear about each step. Use simple words for leaf, pan fry, roll, sun dry, mold, press, and age.
grammar
Check small grammar and spell. 'tea' not 'tie'. Use 'raw tea' and 'ripe tea'.
structure
Idea is clear and the steps are in order.
content
Some good word use for the steps like dry, roll, press.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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