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Band 2

it is important to everyone, including young people to save money for their future. to what extent do you agree and disagree woyj this statement? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples fro your own knowledge or experience

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it
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is important to everyone
including
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, including
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 young
people
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to
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, to
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 save
money
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 for their future or not was always in debate
, in
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. In
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this
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essay
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essay,
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 I will explain why I
completly argeee
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completely agree
 with
this
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 statement.  First of all, having some
saving
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savings
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money
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apply
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will
imporve
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improve
your ability to respond in an emergency situation that can
exeed
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exceed
you
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your
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 normal budget without any complication. Even for young
people
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 will make them more
responsable
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responsible
 about the
money
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 and to value their own effort to get their own
money
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.
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 to that, young
people
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 can start their savings
eairlier
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earlier
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live
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, since they usually do not have as
much
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many
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 expenses as an Adult,
wich
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which
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benificiate
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benefits
 them even more.
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example
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start saving
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starting to save
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money
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since
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at
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 12 years old for sure will give more time to save
money
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instead
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 of starting at 30 years old with two children under your care. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 saving
money
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to
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for
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 everyone
including
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, including
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 young
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people
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people,
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definitly imporve
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definitely improves
 your ability to respond to an emergency situation
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,
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and if you start young
also
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 helps you to value your own effort and gives you plenty of time to save more because of your low expenses at that moment
of
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the
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apply
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life.

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planning
Make a plan before you write. Start with a short intro, then two to three ideas, and finish with a short end.
grammar
Use simple, clear grammar. check verb form and spelling of easy words.
structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Start with a clear topic sentence and end with a link to the next idea.
examples
Give more real life or study examples to back up each point.
cohesion
Use words that join ideas, like also, and, but, so, because.
task response
The writer shows a clear view and keeps to the topic.
content
There are some good ideas, such as saving early can help in a sudden need.
coherence
The flow of ideas is present, with some linking.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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