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The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years.

These pie charts illustrate the
energy
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 production over a period of two years in the same Country.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was a moderate increase in all sources of
energy
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 except for petrol showed a
drawback
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decline
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.
Firstly
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, in
1995
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1995,
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 Coal supply was at
it's
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its
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 peak compared to others at 29.80%, followed by Gas and Petrol at 29.63% and 29.27% respectively,
while
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 Nuclear was at 6.40% and other types of
energy
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 represented the lowest stock.
Secondly
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, after a whole decade of power supply, there was a steady growth of the production of Coal and Gas, both at nearly 31% and Nuclear at 10.10%.
In contrast
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, petrol had a sudden fall from 29.27% to 19.55%.
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, other resources doubled to 9.10%.
To sum up
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, over the years, the
energy
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 supply from all sources has a constant change.

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