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Band 4

Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no denying the fact that
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one could
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could
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can
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 study from
internet
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the internet
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 because universities provide their courses online.
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 it is a commonly held belief that it is beneficial to
less
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apply
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use
transportations
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apply
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public. It is
also
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 an argument that when people
are
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continue studying
online
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online,
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causes
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it becomes
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 boring
so
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, so
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 they feel lazy to open the courses. On one hand, online learning benefits are very good for people who have a job
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, and
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 they want to complete their
master
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master's
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 degree.
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, they feel so
conveinent
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convenient
 and can save their time
by
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because
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 they
did
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do
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 not need to
went
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go
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 to school to take lectures. In
additional
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, I can work with my company and study online .
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, I build learn habit for
long
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a long
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 life.
On the other hand
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, we
have
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are
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 unsatisfied because
these
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there
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is
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are
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 no interactions and bad internet. It is possible to say that only we have interactions from
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the screen
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screen
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screen,
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 we
could’t
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couldn’t
 see the students
and
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, and
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 who is sharing the answers with the
tutor
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tutor,
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 we miss to value
attendance
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of attendance
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.
Moreover
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, we have less confidence
for
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in
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who
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which
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 universities provide online learning.
For instance
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,
study
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a study
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 shows that schools
who
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that
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 provide online courses
they
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apply
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have
bad
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poor
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 quality.
This
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easy
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essay
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 will analyse
this
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 topic from both
of
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apply
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view points
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viewpoints
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 and express my opinion
,
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.
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 On balance,
however
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, I tend to
belief
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believe
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 that I can increase my income by working as a tutor who
teach
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teaches
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 the subject
for
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to
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individual
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individuals
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 and
take
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takes
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salary
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a salary
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 from them and learn
in
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at
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 the same time. After
Covid
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COVID-19
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–
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,
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 19 we saw a lot of global universities that
increase
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increased
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desire
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their desire
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 to teach
through
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apply
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online
and
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, and
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 many people
looking
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are looking
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 for
this
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 feature.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear start, middle and end. State your view in a simple line in the introduction or last sentence.
coherence
Use simple linking words to connect ideas, like First, Also, But, However, In addition, In conclusion.
content
Keep ideas on the topic. Do not add off topic points. Give a clear example to back your point.
content
The essay begins to show a view on online study and its link to work.
content
There is some effort to discuss both sides of the topic.
content
You try to give an opinion about the future and the value of online study.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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