The map show the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map illustrates the
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of Paris
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and highlights two possible locations for opening a new
restaurant
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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site two will be the best for tourist
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due to
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the view of the Eiffel Tower and the Seine River.
In contrast
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, the other location appears to be in a busy
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, filled with traffic and noise from the adjacent park. Location one is positioned on the right bank and west of the Maritime Museum, which attracts 8000 visitors every day, which could be a disadvantage for the
restaurant
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. It is
also
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near the park and lies near the Seine River.
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this
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area
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benefits from proximity to the Bir Hakeim Bridge, it is relatively distant from the tourist areas.
On the other hand
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, Site two is located on the Left Bank
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east of the Eiffel Tower and
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the southern
area
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of the Seine.
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, on the east side of the
restaurant
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, there is an Art Gallery which has 750 visitors on a daily basis.
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, a park is on the opposite side of the
restaurant
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with
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of
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being said, both sites have their merits and demerits.
To sum up
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, the second
area
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for opening the
restaurant
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is a more prominent option, attributed to the adjacent famous landmarks of Paris.

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