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Band 2.5

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram given illustrates the changes
Correct pronoun usage
that was
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 made in the Beechwood Farm
thoughout
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throughout
 the period from 1950 to these days.
Overall
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, the most notable change is that a sheep zone was
devided
Correct your spelling
divided
 into 4 sections
:
Punctuation problem
:
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 camping field, solar panels and 2 parkings. The tracks that formed a triangle were transformed into roads that connected with a barn in the south, which used to be in the
south east
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southeast
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 of the triangle. A holiday
cottages
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cottage
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 had been constructed in the place of an old barn. On the left side of a new barn,
Correct article usage
the vegetables
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vegetables
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vegetable
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 and soft
fruits
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fruit
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 sections remained unchanged,
while
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 a farm shop had been added to
a
Correct article usage
the
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 fruit trees section. The sheep zone underwent a dramatic transformation. The two parking spots were added in the
north west
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north-west
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 and in the east of the road. Above the east parking, four solar panels were constructed,
whereas
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 the camping field with two tents is located on the right side of the other parking zone.

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structure
Make one clear big idea at the start and show the changes in order.
structure
Group the changes by area and then tell what is new there and what was before.
grammar
Use past tense clearly and fix wrong word form e.g. 'was', 'became', 'divided'.
coherence
Be simple with words and use links like first, next, after, finally to join ideas.
content
The essay shows the plan of changes and a few details.
content
It mentions time frame: 1950 to today.
content
It tries to compare old and new parts.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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