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The charts below show the use of water for agriculture products in Australia in 2004 and values of these products to the Australian economy in the same year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first pie chart shows the
percentage
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 of
water
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 used for agricultural products,
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 the second chart demonstrates the proportion of income from agricultural products in Australia in 2004.
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, both charts experienced different trends nds .
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 udege for
water
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 in livestock dominated, profit from fruits was
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in the
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 first place. Regarding the fewer charts , the highest
percentage
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 held livestock at 36%.
Water
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 used for watering cotton and dairy
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is approximately
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 similar at 15% and 19%. Notibly, for sugar and fruit used twice more
water
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 than for rice and vegetables. The lowest proportion was demonstrated
vegetables
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by vegetables
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 at 4% and a little bit higher
rice
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by rice
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 at 5%.
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 letter chart illustrates the proportion of income from agricultural products. The first place held fruits at 44%, which doubled
more
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apply
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than
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that
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dairy
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of dairy
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. Notably, making profit from vegetables, sugar, and livestock shows about similar results at 5%, 6% and 7%. Cotton's
percentage
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 was 13%, which is twice that of dairy production. The lowest figure was the
percentage
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 of rice at 1%.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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