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Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own

VRev is the voltage where, as the slides put it, there is “no net flow of current across the membrane”. For a channel that only carries Ky+,
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 happens at the Ky+ equilibrium potential is where there is “no net
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 of ions”, as noted,
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 using the Nernst equation.” That gives, at 20oC ( (2.303 × RT )/F=58.17
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): Ky+ is monovalent, so Ζ = +1  EKy = 58.17 log (( 20 )/100) = 58.17log (0.2) In round numbers: log (0.2) ≈ − 0.70. EKy ≈ 58.17 × (− 0.70) ≈ − 40.7
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 ≈ − 41
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 So, the reversal potential sits at about − 41
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This text does not answer the task. It does not speak about the idea of being asked to judge competition and coop work.
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Make a clear plan. Start with a short intro that says both sides, then two body paragraphs with reasons and one small amount of example, and end with a short finish.
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Keep to the task. Do not talk on other science ideas. Write about competition and idea of team work as asked.
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Use simple link words to show how you move from one idea to the next. Words like First, Next, But, Also, Finally.
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The text is short and uses steps to show a plan, if set up well.
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There is a seed of plan to tell the topic in a simple way.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • excel
  • outperform
  • advancements
  • academic standards
  • work ethic
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • unhealthy rivalries
  • harmonious
  • supportive
  • collaborative learning
  • social skills
  • communication skills
  • sense of community
  • collective goals
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