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People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on community. What are the causes and solutions? by

A.In normal conditions, I’d give a small current pulse,
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 give the same pulse again after the drug.
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 I just watch how far
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 bends (ΔV). If
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 barely bends, conductance is higher(↑G). If it bends more, conductance is lower (↓G). B.The drug depolarizes the cell. That points to extra inward positive current Na+ is a common one. Ca2+ could
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 be in the mix. Either way,
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 gets pulled upward. C.If the depolarization comes from a conductance drop K+ is the usual one. Less K+ gets out, so
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 drifts upward.

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task response
The essay does not meet the task. It does not talk about why people spend less time with folk in a hood or give clear fix. It shows notes on a cell test instead. Add a short start, then talk on main cause, and give fix, then end with a brief summary.
planning
Plan before you write. Write with a small plan: intro, two or three ways for cause, two or three fixes, short end.
cohesion
Link ideas with small joins like first, next, also, but, and, so, in the end. This helps flow.
structure
Try to keep one idea per paragraph. Start with the main idea, then give a small detail or example.
grammar/vocabulary
Use simple words and clear sentences. Check your spelling and use of signs and dots.
content
Give examples that relate to the task and may be numbers or facts to back up points.
organization
Clear steps A, B, C show a plan.
content
Some clear cause and effect idea is shown.
vocabulary
The text uses real terms for the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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