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Writing Samples
Band 1

Increasing car uses in many global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

A and B give the same current on the I-V plot, with voltage at two different values. Current depends on driving force (ΔV) and the
conductance
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 (G) (I = ΔV×G). The same current can still show up with a trade-off between ΔV and G. A current (I) can have
larger
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a larger
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 driving force with less
conductance
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 could be the same current that
have
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has
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smaller
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a smaller
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 driving force with a larger
conductance
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. The number of channels, and the probability of being open (Po), don’t directly depend on
current
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the current
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 itself. That part comes from
conductance
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,
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apply
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 (
G=
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G
 NPoγ). Two currents with the same value don’t mean they have
same
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the same
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channels
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channel
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 availability.

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task response
To fit a task, show a clear view or goal. Give a short opening, state your position, and finish with a brief end.
coherence cohesion
Make the text easy to read. Put ideas in a simple, plain order. Use small joining words like first, then, also. Make each idea link to the one before.
content
The text uses true facts and math form to show the idea.
coherence
There are small links between ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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