The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas.

The diagram illustrates the whole path of
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inside the environment for both rural areas with a vast number of plants and city territories stacked with
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constructions. Generally, during the precipitation stage,
water
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drops on the soil from the atmosphere,
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infiltrating down to the
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table
passing
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through the permeable topsoil and less permeable subsoil on rock.
Later
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a baseflow is formed, by following which the
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appears in a runoff. In parallel, on the outer layer of the
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surface
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such
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processes as evaporation and transpiration are conducted.
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, a part of the liquid returns
back
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to
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atmosphere, meanwhile another part flows to the runoff.
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in the forested areas the
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cycle does not face any shortcomings, in the urban areas,
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, evaporation, transpiration, infiltration into the soil and,
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, the baseflow are reduced. It is connected to the presence of buildings and other constructions located on the surface in large volumes that block some
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from flowing down to other layers.
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, other differences between
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locations
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in the increased pollution of the runoff and erosion of the lower soil layers.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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