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Computers today can quickly and accurately translate languages, therefore, it is a waste of time to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
There is no doubt that
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 in recent years in speed and
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accurate
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 it is a commonly held belief that learning
foreign
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great
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, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider to disagree
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a waste
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 of time
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because
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learning foreign
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 has many benefits rather
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computers
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Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, there
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 no
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guarantees
 to find
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time the
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people
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, when
people
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 will contact with each other
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directly
 without
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the need
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any
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michean
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machinery
. In
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, if the
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sundly
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suddenly
 get off,
people
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humen
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human
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drop
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 down and replaced it
by
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opprations
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operations
 to humans
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who
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have
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 a foreign language and
contunue
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continue
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Body paragraph 2
Another point to consider is that when
people
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language
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language,
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 they will learn cultures of places and nations
which
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to
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humans
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Moreover
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,
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 will improve
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commonicition
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communication
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emotions
and
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 they translate
by
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good
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a good
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then
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,
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humans
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felling
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feelings
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 and can not translate
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what
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such
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 as hospitals.
Conclusion
In conclusion, despite
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people
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language
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 it will be more
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valuable
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then
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than
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computers
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task response
Make your answer clear from the start. State your view in one sentence.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a topic sentence that tells the main point.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'however'.
content
Give a real example or simple reason to back each point.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar so ideas stay clear.
task response
A clear view is stated.
structure
Intro and conclusion exist.
coherence
Some linking words used.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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